F: Share a snippet from one of your favorite dialogue scenes you’ve written and explain why you’re proud of it.
God, I hate these questions if only because I'm never quite sure how to answer them. But after some though, this bit between Jonathan and Joyce from Paper Tiger sprang to mind:
“Jonathan,” his mother says and gestures towards the sofa. He doesn’t move. “Please, can you just sit down?”
“Mom,” his voice cracks as he says it and he wants to hate himself for it but there are too many other feelings warring inside him. He pushes them aside, trying to find hope buried beneath them. “Time for a bigger house?”
“Something like that,” she perches on the arm of the sofa, ankles crossed and hands clasped. She’s nervous, he realizes.
She looks so sad as she shakes her head no.
“Mom.” Tears spring into his eyes against his will and he swallows against the lump in his throat. “Come on, Mom, please. It’s not—Please. Please don’t do this.”
“I need to,” her voice is soft, as gentle and kind as any night she soothed him through his father’s abuse or his loneliness at school. That makes it worse somehow. “We all need to. Will and El, they need to get away from here too. We need a fresh start.”
“I don’t need to. I’m fine. I’m—I’ve got Nancy. I’m almost done with school. Mom, please—”
“I know, sweetheart, I know. But you need the fresh start, too. We all do. We can’t live like this anymore.”
It just.. sounds like them. I can hear it out of their mouths, their tone, their inflection, where their voices would crack. I can hear Charlie and Winona's performance of this dialogue, if that makes sense. Like if you turned this scene into a script and handed it to them, they'd get it right in the table read.
I'm always proud when I can write something that feels that in-character. And I found myself thinking about this scene a lot when I was writing their conversation in "in the morning i'll be better" because in some ways, they're finishing the talks they had in Paper Tiger.
I actually like most or the dialogue in Paper Tiger a lot, now that I think about it. It feels extremely in character, very true. Nancy trying to outsmart Joyce when they suspect the moving, their own conversation after Jonathan finds out, Jonathan trying to obliquely interrogate his mom about it while washing dishes after dinner. It all feels like it could be part of the show, and I’m very proud of that.
(p.s. to the duffer brothers: let jonathan and his mother fucking talk in season 5 or i'm coming after you.)