Reading some old wips like I really like the vibe of this actually and some of the characters are really fun but DAMN what was 16 year old me even THINKING
#the tone of narration doesn't fit the scenes at all#I put infodump in the middle of dialogues#I made an 18 year character murder several people in the most gruesome and cruel way ever#and then be like 'what about it no big deal'#I revealed the backstory and motives of both main characters in the first 5k words#the worldbuilding is the worst thing I've ever read#I had fun tho and overall it has a good vibe#so congrats to past me#it's just funny#*18 year old